Raziel Moore | Monocle

28/11/11 – interstitial – Overplanned

In challenge, microstory on 29/11/2011 at 2:36 pm

My attempt at 5 Minute Fiction for the week. Made the final 5 voting round when I didn’t expect to. The challenge was NaNoWriMo related, but I’m not doing Nano, so I made something up. “Main character sees his life flash before their eyes.”


As Juris fell, he realized he’d overplanned. He’d lived 114 years, done good, had few regrets. He’d always figured he wouldn’t have time to see it coming, so he ritually reviewed his life, most every day for the last 30 years at least. The good parts he smiled about. The bad parts he tried to learn from, and the regrets he tried to banish. He’d gotten quite good at the review – enough that the whole “life flashing before your eyes” thing was close to literally true – and summonable at will, and it always brought him a smile.

There really wasn’t any way he’d have been able to foresee the cascade of failures that sent him over the edge of a hundred and fortieth story balcony in Dubai. If he had to go, he supposed, it was quite the dramatic step to take. So he he thought about his life, and smiled.

Problem was, by the time he reached the 30th, he was bored.

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